I've been writing two different posts for a few days now, and neither of them are posted yet. I've had an extremely busy few days, but still, that's no excuse. It's been a while. Here's a poem I penned last night. It isn't very good, but I've had the line, "I NEVER ASKED YOU TO FALL IN LOVE WITH ME." (It sounds just like that in my head) in my head, for a while, so I had to do something with it. Enjoy it or don't. Your choice of course :)
I NEVER ASKED.
I never asked you to fall in love with me.
I never told you you could.
I never said it would be a good idea.
I think you misunderstood me.
(Most people do)
Because you did.
Someone is going to get hurt.
And it's probably you.
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I really like this, it's concise, blunt, and interesting overall. Good job :)
ReplyDeleteI like it. It has a sort of simplicity to it, and yet it's complex.
ReplyDelete(Yeah, I'm confusing myself too.)
Your syntax is a little confusing in the second stanza, in the sense the periods are really jarring - I defy you to read that out loud and have it not sound silly. xP Commas or just blank syntax might work better...
ReplyDeleteAlso, this:
"I think you misunderstood me.
(Most people do)
Because you did."
Is a bit confusing, but it's a bit of ambiguity that might serve you well. Maybe... but yeah, watch the periods, and I think there might be more to be said here, if you wanted to fully poem-ize it. Maybe some figurative language? x3
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